Hi all,
We look forward to reading your Landseer inspired letters soon.
Thank you for all your hard work so far and producing such fantastic writing.
Keep it up.
Hi all,
We look forward to reading your Landseer inspired letters soon.
Thank you for all your hard work so far and producing such fantastic writing.
Keep it up.
Orange Class, Grafton School. Shared Writing – Landseer
Hi Orange class,
Congratulations on your letter.
I like your attention to detail and vivid descriptions. You create a scene through your use of adjectives.
Keep up the hard work.
Our shared writing
Hi Lilac Class,
Thank you for your writing,
I really like your opening addressed to the beloved wife and your exclamation at the start “Oh darling”. It involves us immediately in your letter.
Thank you for all your hard work. I hope you’re proud of yourselves.
We have enjoyed looking at the Landseer painting this week.
Here is Matilda’s letter. It will be posted in two separate pages.
I like your work because it has details about the story.
Here is the second page of Matilda’s letter.
Well done! This is a remarkable piece of writing. The letter format was impeccable because its set out well and very easy to follow. As a result, we thought you organised your ideas clearly. Your letter was incredible and thrilling!
HI Matilda,
I like the way your letter uses the inspiration of the painting but you add your own details like the ancient tree. You also help us to think about the journey before the moment focused on in the painting.
Thank you for sharing your letter with us.
To elisa ,
you have yoused cool adjectives
hi Matilda i love your work ,it’s extremely interesting i just want to read more
This is Rufus’s letter, again in two pages.
Here is the second page of Rufus’s letter.
HI Rufus,
Thank you for sharing your letter with us.
I like the way you’ve re-told the events but also let us see how one of the individuals in the painting might be feeling. Your focus on the meat also shows you’ve studied the painting in detail and are able to use this information in your writing.
Keep up the hard work.
Here are three of 4O’s letters, two pages each. The first one is from Gregory.
Hi Gregory,
Your letter is very interesting as it helps us understand the role of a servant in these times. You capture the drudgery of their daily routine very well.
Thank you for sharing your letter with us.
Here’s page two of Gregory’s.
Here is the first page of Annabel’s.
Annabel’s second page.
We were speechless when we read this because it was so mind-blowing. You used incredible setting descriptions and this helped us to understand what was going on. Your word choices were marvellous and we could imagine we were actually there. Well done!
HI Annabel,
You manage to convey both the horror and excitement of the hunt. Your use of short sentences when describing the hunt builds a sense of excitement.
Keep on experimenting with different sentence lengths in your writing.
Here is Phoebe’s first page.
Phoebe’s second page.
HI Phoebe,
Thank you for sharing your letter with us.
You use contrast very effectively. The contrast between the master’s delight and the servant’s distress is intriguing.
Contrast can be a very effective technique in writing… continue to explore how and when to use it.
Hi. Here is Ashana’s letter from Canonbury
Hi Ashana!
This letter was incredible! We’d love to have a friend like you to write us such marvellous letters. Eithne especially liked the way you used font for effect. It was creative and exquisite. Well done!
HI Ashana,
Thank you for sharing your letter with us.
I like the opening of your letter in particular. You create a mysterious scene with the moonlit camp and I like your use of the word “steed” for horse as it’s appropriate to the time.
A thoughtful piece of writing. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Balthasar from Canonbury.
Hi Balthasar!
The rest of King class thought your letter was a very serious letter. Your layout was impeccable and your content was mind-blowing. Beray thought that the adjectives you used were thrilling! Meanwhile, Ashana thought that your descriptions were outstanding – so much so, that she almost cried!
Hi Balthasar,
It’s encouraging to see you experimenting with vocabulary in your writing. I like the range of interesting vocabulary you use “steed”, “piffle” “horror” and “massacre”.
Keep up the hard work.
Hi Balthasar
I love the way that you’ve described on your way back to the camp and how you could barley feel yourself holding the rains.
Beatriz from Canonbury. Letter.
Hi Beatriz,
Maisha thought your letter was very emotional and romantic.
Noemi thought you ordered your thoughts well in chronological order and therefore we could understand it. Well done! Your choice of words were mind-blowing.
Hi Beatriz,
What an interesting letter. I like your description but I’m really interested by Charlie C. Who is he? How does he know Mary? Why does he want to follow people?
Leaving details out of your writing can involve the reader and your letter intrigued me.
Dear Michael Walsh,
Thank you for the reply. I am replying to you to answer your questions.
Charlie C. and Mary know each other because they are husband and wife.
Your reply was so sweet.
From Beatriz
Zsa zsa’s letter from Canonbury.
Hi Zsa Zsa!
We liked how you used ‘Shakespearian’ language, we felt this really suited the era of the painting.
We liked how you used the phrase ‘melee of mangled feathers’ in your letter and how you signed it Sir Edward Henry Lanseer. Perhaps, Sir Edward has even put himself in the painting!
Hi Zsa zsa,
How brave of you to try writing in an old form of English. I really like to see pupils experimenting with their writing and you’ve made a fantastic attempt.
Keep up the hard work!
Here is Andrew’s letter from 4G Rotherfield Primary School.
Due to the fact that you made a splendid work I really enjoy it
Hi Andrew,
Congratulations on your letter.
I like the way you’ve structured your letter in to a logical order and used paragraphs effectively.
Keep up the hard work!
Dear Andrew,
We in Rowling Class loved the descriptive language you used in your writing. We especially liked the way you started some of your sentences with an adverbial (“avoiding the attack…”). Furthermore, you use of rhetorical questions made your reader think about how you felt too.
Well done,
From Year 4 Rowling Class, Canonbury
I love your descriptive language you and nice handwrititng
A persuasive letter, written by Mo
Hi Mo,
Thank you for sharing your letter.
I think the opening of your letter is powerful and clearly informs the reader of the contents. You use an impressive range of vocabulary and I like your direct question.
Keep up the hard work!
A persuasive letter, written by Humayra
Hi Humayra,
I like the way you extend the hunt in the painting and describe a scene of multiple hunts and killings. It makes your argument very powerful. I also like the way you appeal to royalty to stop the hunting but you use language subtlety to do so.. .like you use of “please” in your last paragraph.
Thank you for sharing your work with us.
I like this picture because it uses imagination
I really like your handwriting you really put so much effort in your work
great work love the letters
Here is Kaan’s letter. We were impressed by the emotion and imagnation and also by his contrasting sentence length.
This is Nogaye’s letter. We were impressed by her punctuation and her openers.
I hope you are as impressed as we are by Youssef’s ambitious sentences with 2 adjectives, an extender then another 2 adjectives. We also love his picture!
Here is Daron’s letter. I like the way Daron asks his reader questions about why the bird had to die.
Sorry. Here is Daron’s letter.
hi Matilda I like your work it is really interesting
This is Thomas’s letter inspired by the Landseer painting. I love how much detail he has included.
Ismail tried really hard to include lots of the historical detail about hawking in his letter.
Shakil really thought about how the character writing the letter felt about hawking. Do you think this person would want to go hawking again?
Tasnia has used some wonderful adverbial openers in her letter. She has also told a full story through her writing.