Hi all,
I hope you enjoyed studying Turner’s painting: A Coast Scene with Fishermen Hauling a Boat Ashore.
We look forward to reading your recounts soon.
Hi all,
I hope you enjoyed studying Turner’s painting: A Coast Scene with Fishermen Hauling a Boat Ashore.
We look forward to reading your recounts soon.
Canonbury King’s Class Shared Writing 1.
Canonbury shared writing 2. King’s class.
Hi King’s class,
What a lovely piece of shared writing. I’m sure you must have enjoyed working together to create this.
I really like this immaculate piece of writing as the creator of it.
I also really enjoyed making this it took a while but it was worth it!
we really enjoyed writing this piece of work and it’s really good says Catherine, a new girl in are class as she’s reading it
Canonbury Rowling Class. Shared writing.
Wow this is a splendid piece of work your class has done good work.
You guys are the first school to do this.
This picture is one of the best pictures i have ever seen on this art blog/gy/ and it shows a lot of emotion to me. if you want to be an artist, well this is an astonishing example to start your career.
it is extremely fascinating to see.
thank you for sharing your work. 🙂 and (>:)
Hi Rowling Class,
I like shared writing. I could just imagine all the discussion you had and everyone contributing to different aspects. I really like the use of dialogue to open the recount.
Keep up the hard work.
These are very good Shared Writing and it’s by Y4 Rowling class
HI king class
fantastic work you done
This is an amazing piece of writing! I am astonished at the adjectives and your use of dialogue is amazing. You used lots of different punctuation and the way you set out your paragraphs really well.
Great piece can’t wit to see you r next piece of work!!!!
This is a great piece of writing .I loved your use of words adjectives.
I really like the way you used abstract nouns, personification and similes all in one piece of writing.
This a splendid piece of work Its amazing.
Class 4B from Yerbury greatly enjoyed discussing the Turner painting and produced some fantastic writing.
Here is an example from Tahira.
Well done for your splendid piece of writing. I really liked how you used lots of adjectives to describe what you are saying. I also like how you explained how you felt in that situation.
Hi Tahira,
Thank you for sharing your work with us.
You show the heroic nature of the fisherman and I like your metaphor in the last line. It’s very powerful.
Here is Class 4o’s piece of shared writing inspired by the Turner painting.
I set off from home at 8 am on Saturday morning and met the usual crew on the shore. The sky looked stormy and I hoped that we would not get stuck in a gale. We boarded the boat and prepared to leave. The captain was in his cabin ready to go when we found a hole in the net. John quickly sewed it back together with spare rope and the captain told us to make sure the sails were upright.
We cast off and made our way out to sea. It wasn’t long before the waves started getting bigger and bigger but we carried on for half an hour determined to reach the fishing grounds. Suddenly a huge cloud of misery came above our ship. The clouds got darker. Much darker. The boat tossed and turned like leaves falling from a tree in a storm.
The captain ordered John to thrust the tattered net overboard into the wide black sea. Ten minutes later we hauled it out and it was bursting with fish of all different shapes and sizes. We threw back the small sardines which were too bony to eat. We put the rest of the huge catch, which would fetch a good price at market, into the wicker baskets on the waterlogged deck.
By now the clouds were heavier and darker. It started to pour with rain. The clouds turned charcoal black. We heard thunder claps and saw flashes of lightning reflecting off the sea. Breakers rushed at the boat. Thomas, the captain’s brother, was so light that he nearly got tossed overboard. John moved quickly, grabbed Thomas by the ankle and pulled him back to safety.
The captain was worried that boat would soon get hit by lightning so we headed west back to shore. By now the waves were flinging over the side of the boat harder. Much harder. Suddenly the anchor rope became loose and crashed into the boat making a small hole in the hull. Freezing water began sweeping in spilling over our boots. We knew we had to get back. We began tacking and the boat headed home. Finally with one last rush of a giant wave the boat hit the shore.
That is a very intresting piece of writing 4B.
In addition to our recount writing, Mars class created charcoal landscapes, inspired by Turners painting. Here is a picture by Adil.
STAR POST
Congratulations Adil.
It’s great to see you’ve moved beyond the writing task and tried creating landscapes. This is a fascinating one.
Here is a picture by Kennedy, she has really focussed on the contrast between light and dark, seen in Turner’s skyline.
Wow! I was in awe to see this picture. I really liked hoe you didn’t colour in the picture too dark. Well done!
STAR POST
Hi Kennedy,
Thank you for sharing your art with us.
It’s great to see you experimenting with shade and tone and exploring Turner’s technique.
I’ll add this to the header of the blog soon.
Here is Jeniyah’s recount of the fishing trip.
Hi Jeniyah,
Thank you for sharing your work with us.I think you’ve certainly managed to use interesting sentence openers. Your first sentence is very effective in drawing us in to the story.
Hajar’s account of the fishing trip.
Hi Ian I like your writing is very neat i wish i had such a neat handwriting just like yours
Ian i like your handwriting its so neat i wish i had such a neat handwriting just like yours
Hi Hajar,
Thank you for sharing your writing with us.
I enjoyed your recount and you set up a sense of mystery from your first line.
Keep up the hard work.
Daisy’s writing blew me away! It was so descriptive. Enjoy.
Hi Daisy,
A super piece of writing. Your choice of language is subtle, your similes are imagainative and I like your opening with the memory still haunting your narrator.
I hope you’re proud of your work. You should be.
I like how you used a simile , Daisy
wow this blew me away well done:)
i love your handwriting it is so so great you are really good at it!!!!!!!!!
Here is Goda’s most ambitious piece of writing she has written this year. She showed such determination to do her best.
HI Goda,
Another fantastic recount. You use some wonderful similes and I like the way you make the situation even more dramatic by telling us about the starving country.
Keep up the hard work.
Dear Goda,
your writing was REALLY fabulous because of your handwriting and very good use of” To our horror” and rather awesome simile”The wind was howling like a wolf”!In my opinion, every bit of this is fabulous. I agree with Mrs.Farmer! You showed really good determination and Ambition.
Ron thought the man in white was playing a tune to calm and inspire the fishermen in their work. I love how he used this idea in his writing. Also, great handwriting!
HI Ron,
Yes the idea of the fishermen playing their tune despite the terrible trip is inspired. Turner would have approved of portraying them in this heroic way.
I tried to do a great piece of writing and it was.
I love how Abubakar pretended to be Turner tied to the mast. Do you think he comes across as heroic?
HI Abubakar,
You’ve certainly created a heroic fisherman… we admire his determination to face his fears.
Thank you for sharing your work and keep on working hard.
Well done! You showed me you can use adjectives to describe a setting and a character’s feelings. Fantastic work:)!
Ridwan once again astonished us with his Art.
Hi Ridwan,
A lovely piece of art. It’s always interesting when you write and create an accompanying illustration. Your drawing reminds me of Turner’s work. Your pencil marks are simillar to his brush strokes.
Keep up the hard work.
I like your writing and your lovely picture especially the couler .
I was impressed by Abdirahman’s similes in his recount.
Hi Abdirahman,
thank you for your recount and picture. The speech bubble made me smile. I like the imaginative similes you’ve used. They work well.
Keep up the hard work.
Thank you for saying kind things about my work
This is Mariam’s account of the fisherman’s day. I really enjoyed her descriptive language.
I really enjoyed some of the phrases Issraa has used to describe being on the boat in a storm. Which is your favourite?