Hi all,
Thank you for all your wonderful work so far.
Please share your thoughts and writing on the Patten and Brautigan poems here.
We look forward to receiving them.
Hi all,
Thank you for all your wonderful work so far.
Please share your thoughts and writing on the Patten and Brautigan poems here.
We look forward to receiving them.
One day I was in my garden
when suddenly a troll fell from the sky
it was green and plump and it thumped its feet as it walked
I took it on a stroll
it didn’t like London at all
and it ate walls
So then I took it home
it had a massive moan
so it sped out into the garden and disappeared
Hi all,
That’s an interesting idea. What inspired it?
thats real great
thats good
this poem seemed like it would be a good performing poem like you did in class.I especially loved the way how he thumped his feet because trolls seem load creatures,
i like that poem because trolls don’t actually fall from the sky and that sounds really cool
I found a unicorn,
beautiful and bright,
I never really see it,
It only comes out at night,
I glinced it in a meadow,
calm and content,
It cried rainbow tears,
As it saw the spooky shadows,
It flew away in horror,
And we never saw it again.
Hi Gillespie,
I like the idea of a unicorn … It’s similar to the dragon as it’s not an everyday creature.
It gives something out of the normal that has a personality and description that you can build from because no one has actually seen one.
This is my poem. I hope you like it. Have fun reading it!
Big massive Godzilla
I’ve found a big massive Godzilla in
The city.
Think it must have come from underground
BECAUSE ITS BROWN,GREEN WITH dirt all over and red eyes.
I fed it on thing’s, like chicken, we tried to make him drink coke but he spat it out.
It stared up at me as if to say, I need large foods that you can never provide.
He uses houses as clothes, leaves as blanket and trees as a pillow; it is sad and lonely here.
He found a flower and fell asleep in
A big humongous, girnormous
Puddle of tears
By Ashley Grey
Hi Ashley,
Thank you for your poem.
I like the idea of changing the focus to Godzilla… you create sympathy for him with your final line which is very powerful.
i like the way you incorporated things from the real poem.
i like that because something are real and somethings are not so it sounds really cool
The last Unicorn
I saw a unicorn as i was walking down the street,
It shot a rainbow out of its horn,
It hit my door and a star was born,
Its hooves started to click and then she started to kick,
Its glistening eyes started to glow in the cold white snow,
I needed to leave but i couldn’t breath,
Its gorgeos main was striking me.
we tried to rhyme in some way and i love the way it ended up.
THAT IS SOOOOOO AMAZING(:
I like both of the poems because it gives me a mix emotions.
I found this poem a bit weird because why would someone keep a pet dragon inside a shed.
I found the poem peculiar because why would you keep a dragon in your house and shed and how would your parents or anyone else not find out. However, I love the poem and the author is amazing and has written a great poem also he has a great imagination.
Yes interesting question Rachael? Does he keep it in the house of the shed? Does it make a difference?
I like the poem because it is interesting.
I like the poem a small dragon because its nice that the child tried to feed it food even though the dragon didn’t like it. I like the poem a boat because its sweet that the family accepted the werewolf for who he is and didn’t seem to be afraid of him.
when we found out the animals in the pom where mythical we were very supervised.
I liked the poem because it was very interesting and mysterious.
I liked the Knight because it was misleading in a way and I liked that it wasn’t focusing on one thing.
Could you explain how it was misleading Neeve?
I like the poem pattern and brautigan because it hides why the troll didn’t like London but then you think of loads of questions in your head and you want to know why he didn’t like London.