Dear all,
We look forward to seeing your adverts inspired by John Joseph Merlin. Remember to leave a comment on each other’s work as well.
Dear all,
We look forward to seeing your adverts inspired by John Joseph Merlin. Remember to leave a comment on each other’s work as well.
Z&H you have used a lot of good adverbs and adjetivs
Would you like to try these roller skates?
Come and buy our weighing scales!
great kiri
WOW!
I love your poster. It’s very colourful and bright!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
me and Reiss think that the work is amazing , we, amber done this before I chose the
‘the razing roller skates’.
This advert was made by Harry. I like how he has included customers’ opinions in order to make it persuasive and fun for the audience!
i really like t because it is very persuasive.
That’s amazing
I like how ur letter is persuasive and the illustrations r quite good. ur illutrations r better than mine.
This advert was made by Ava. I like how eye-catching and informative it is. The slogan is also very catchy!
These vlogs are very fun!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I really like the letters and advert writing look amazing and letters are stunning
all of you done great keep up the work!
Aailyah’s persuasive advert!
all of the letters are great
I like your use of persuasive openers.
I love All of your work it looks beautiful and amazing.
Amazing work.
me to. I agree.
You have did amazing work
I really like your Work Zac and Harry.I loved the conjunctions you did.Well done.
I really like how you put lots of information into your amazing work. I really liked how it was described.
WELL DONE EVERYONE
I think you have put a lot of effort into your piece of work. Well done.
I must say that everyone has put so much effort in this piece of work.
i like how you’ve used sooooooooooooo much ajectives zach and harry
I like how ambler and all of you has set out the work so beatiful.
Everyone has done fantastic with lots of detail.
Your work about the gouty chair was fantastic. To improve you should make your advert more eye catching. Love your artwork by the way.
I love how people can post and comment on this website . It’s epic!!!!
I love all of your creations . To be honest, Ambler has done the advert amazingly . I wish you could put more work up. Good luck on your next piece of work!
me and dogukan made our own
This is our work!
Thank you both for sharing and all your hard work. Keep it up!
Very colourful
I think you tried very hard. Keep up the brilliant work.
Trying hard is very important. Thank you for pointing that out Sabriya.
Good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Keep up the good work
Lovely and neat
I like how you put some pictures and colour. I like how you put writing too. The picture stands out more than the writing.
This is the advert I created.
Thank you for sharing Kiri and I hope you’re proud of your effort.
I’m sure other pupils will leave comments on your work.
Very neat and I like how you have drawn the skeleton clock
It looks very good
Hi Ahlam , I want to say that I agree with you . Kiri has put a lot of effort in his (r her) work . It is great.
I LIKE IT!!!! I LIKE IT!!!!
This is our piece of work!
Your picture is fabulous
It is also so SSSUUUPPPEEERRR
this piece of work is fab.also neat!
Heres my work
The gouty chair was based on wheel chairs.
Hi heres are work! we chose this because we think that decaibled people get out side more!
I think you done a really good job because you used lots of information
REALLY LIKE ITS GREAT
LOVE IT …REALLY LIKE THE INFORMATION IN IT..
I think the work is SUPERCALIFRAGILISTICEXPIALIDOCIOUS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
PS: When I said supercalifragilisticexpialidocious , I meant surprised (in a good way).
i like how you said that Rihab
I really like your title. It is really good because it sort of rhymes and also uses alliteration.
this is our work
Help Abuser and Adnan , I done the same piece of art .I really like ur work. Maybe u could add some more of facts?.
This is the best of ours
Very lovely handwriting and I like how you’ve drawn the chair
I bet Michael Walsh will love u r piece of work
i like how you have used bullet points
This is our work
so colour full,which is me favriote
I agree with Maryam
I like your work because it has beautiful colours and I like how you thoght about blind people
Thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Maria created an advert to promote the Mechanical Swan created by John Joseph Merlin.
King Class voted for this advert because it met all the key features of an advert which we discussed. For example it is eye-catching, there is a use of slogan and use of powerful adjectives. We believe her advert is very persuasive. What do you think?
I like the tittle it made me want to read it
I really like it
It is really amazing
comment
Your advert is very funny because you put Amazon and Ebay in it. Also your advert has a date and a particular shop to buy the clock.
The shop is called DANCY.
Why did you write your date as 1781 April 1?
Perhaps next time use adjectives and pronouns more often.
You could have used a olden name for the shop.
Hi Eylul,
I’m sure they’ll find your feedback very helpful. You’ve outlined what you like about the work but also made some sensitive suggestions.
Ok thank you for the comment I will do what you said.
I really like your advert ,it has made me want to save up for your wonderful skeleton clock even though I have a watch. You have priced this product at a very good price. Perhaps next time correct the name to John Joseph Merlin.
Roll with the Rollers!!
Well done do you like roller skates?
I want to ask yasmin if you like vlogging?
Yes thank you for asking
looking nice!
WELL DONE!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU DONE GREAT..
Super Silver Swan
i like your advert it catches are attention
Thank you Alana and nancy
I really liked your work ,IT WAS AAMMAAZZIINNGG! because you used some facts about swons
thank you Yasmin
Lovely piece of work
Hi Ahlam,
Thank you for commenting on another pupil’s work. What in particular do you like about it?
i love the drawings and every thing .keep up the good work!
i also like ur facts
thank you maryam
I REALLY LIKE IT .GREAT PICTURE………….
thank you Nancy
I really like your advert . It’s unique to the others . This is because that yours is the only one which is about the silver swan. It’s not bad to be the odd one out. I’m saying it is good that it is different .
PS: I also like that you put the “SUPER S” on the headline!
I really like how the colours really stand out in your picture, I also love your picture
thank you zachary
I like the bullet points. This piece of work is great .
that advert is amazing . plz may u let me buy it
hahaha thank you luis
I love your work Tillie it is great me and my class loved it when we saw it on the blog this morning.
Thank you Sophia im glad that you and your class liked it
i really like youe handwriting
Thank you maryam
I love the way you drew the Silver Swan.
thank you dana
I like you advert because you put amozon and e-bay .Why did you pick the skeleton clock? Was it your favorite one?
Well done Yasmina and Angelina. I like how you have used special offers and humour. Is this your favourite invention that John Joseph Merlin made? And if it is why? My favourite invention is the mechanical silver swan. Perhaps next time you could put them into smaller chunks of writing.
Your work was really funny and I would like to check in Amazon or Ebay. What is your favourite invention what he made. Perhaps next time you can split it up little bit
What wonderful adverts you four should be advert makers when you four grow up!
I really like this website. I also like the pictures people have created.
We’re very pleased. Please share one of your favourite pieces of art when you can.
our work
WOW!
nice heading (and writing) Diego and Nancy I also like your adverbs and how you included an example in your writing.
Well done Diego and Nancy. We really enjoyed reading your advert. In particular we liked the use of humour and the special offers and how you added examples to persuade potential buyers. It’s a shame the offer has ran out, we would have loved to buy this famous clock! Perhaps we’ll search on ebay. Is this your favourite John Joseph Merlin’s invention? And if so why? We thought that perhaps next time you could organise the text in smaller chunks to make it easier to read.
WELL I GLAD YOU LIKED IT ,THANKS FOR WAYS WE COULD IMPROVE IT
I really like your work
I like the humour that you have used and I also like the joke you made about amazon and eBay. And don’t worry I will check it on eBay at home. Perhaps next time you will use smaller chunks if you do another one. You could have more adjectives.
Thanks like it to its realy interesting and it was just a joke about eabay.
Your work was really funny and I would like to check in Amazon or Ebay. What is your favourite invention what he made. Perhaps next time you can split it up a little bit
Well done Diego and Nancy. I like the offers and the humour . Too bad the offer’s gone. I was 300 years late! I’ll check on Amazon and Ebay. Is the skeleton clock your favourite John Joseph Merlin invention? If yes why?
Well done Diego and Nancy your advert is very funny. Ebay or amazon is out of skeleton clocks so where else can you find it? P.S did you get DANCY from Diego NANCY combined. is the skeleton clock your favourite JJ Merlin invention?
i really like your headline because its stands out and makes me want to read it.
i love your headline because it stands out.
I like your piece of work especially your heading it stands out
The headline stands out so much
I love all the description. YOUR PEICE OF WORK IS AMMMMMMMMAZING.
I like how u have used very detailed sentences
If I could , I would DEFINITELY buy it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I really like your work.Well done.
Hi Nancy and Diego. I love your advert so much. I love your title.
I like how you have written the price, I want to buy it!!
Our work
I really like the way you described the skeleton clock plus the use of adverbs but what I think you could improve is maybe you could like tell us what it dose and why we should buy the skeleton clock. I also really like your heading and the swirly writing. You have made me inspired by Thomas Merlly and I now want to become an inventor to.
i agree with you. there work is amazing.
i like the work to!! Well done zac and Harry
I like how you described the skeleton clock.
thanks sabriya
I really like your advert. It’s really nice because you have given benefits and a price. Is the Skeleton clock your favourite John Joseph Merlin’s invention? You could have made the price a little lower and the slogan a bit catchy.
I read your advert and I liked it. It was really nice. I liked that you added special offers and a price. Do you think the skeleton clock was the best invention? Could you make the price lower because its just to much and the slogan could be a little bit more catchy.
I read your advert and I liked it. It was really nice. I loved that you added special offers. Do you think the skeleton clock was the best invention? Could you make the price lower because its just to much and the slogan could be a little bit more catchy.
Well done Yasmina and Angelina I really like your advert especially your slogan”The inspired golden clock”.Also I like the part when you said that the golden clock is £444,44.Do you like this item because if you do explain why. Perhaps next time you could spell things right.
Good blog but I think you could of reduced the price and used ginnys instead of £p
That’s a helpful suggestion Mary. Thank you.
Thank you
I truly do think that you should correct the name of the inventor who is actually called john joseph merlin. I really like the title of your persuasive advert as it stands out and explains a lot about the product. I will definitely be selling a couple of thousands of computers, diamond jewellery, flats, cars etcetera to buy this clock I really like the sound of a clock being made out of large wooden shoes although in the picture it seems to be made out of cogs not clogs.
I like your advert very much , the facts and jokes. But he was called john joseph merlin , and you spelled cog Incorrectly.
Yasmina and Angelina I love you piece of work
i really like the fonts and the way it is set out
Yasmina , did you know that the 1700s was in the Georgian era ?
Hi Rihab,
Thank you for identifying the era for us. Why was it called Georgian?
It was called Georgian because at that time there were 4 kings ruling at the time and their names were George.
Nice work
I think u tried hard! Well done
The writing is very good .I WOULD OBVIOUSLY BUY IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
great
cool
I really liked how u have used lots of adjectives to describe the skeleton clock!
I think the name is john joseph merlin (his birth name was Jean Joseph merlin). Anyway, I really like your work
I like your font on the headline. I think the work is a 10/10!!
I like how Angelina and Yasmina made the headline diffrent.
I really like yur work! If it was at a sale, I would obviously buy it. I think that the skeleton clock was a really cool invention cos it is so shiny and gold. I also like John Joseph Merlin because of his inventions.
NICE WORK!!!!!!!
I like how you guys used commas and cappitl leters also i like your adjectives
I like the work Yasmina and Angelina. I like the style of writing.
This is our work
Hi Zac and Harry,
Thank you for being the first to share your wonderful advert. I can see you’ve used many features of a persuasive advert but I’ll leave it to others to identify them. Keep up the hard work!
Thanks Michael .
Great work zac. I like it a lot!
harry u would have worked as hard as zac great great great workXD (:
We thought this was a really inspiring article. You included many great uses for the skeleton clock (we especially liked the showing off at parties idea), lots of powerful adjectives and the history of the inventor.
Well done!!!
Hi King Class,
Thank you for taking the time to comment on another school’s work.
I’m sure they’ll appreciate the feedback.
dear Zachary and harry I really like your adverbs
yeah and i like how you put the picture in the middle and put 2 paragragh be side them
OH! i also like without a doubt zach and harry.
Thanks Connor! Have you spotted any adjectives, adverbs and conjunctions!
dear zach and harry i like how you’ve put your writing into colums
i clearly agree immani but i done expect them to write good
Zac and Harry I enjoyed it so much why did you choose skeleton clock why not roller skates I wood like to know.
I enjoyed it to
Hi Zac and Harry, I just love your ad! :). I like it because you included soooooooooooooooooooooooo many adjectives. Can you give a link where I can buy it? If you don’t that’s fine to me. Thanks. Perhaps next time you make the writing look bigger. So, are you going to make more adverts? Anyways do you like to blog in your spare time? Bye for now!!!!!!
I like to vlog on here. It’s fun.
me too
well done zac and harry I like the way you have arranged your text you have definatly got your point across well maybe next time add a special offer or something what do you think is the best invention from jhon joseph merlin pesonaly I think the gouty chair is but that’s just my opinion:)
i like your skeleton clock i wish i was back in ambler
Hi Adnan, do you like my and one of my best friend’s work? Anyway, you’r still one of my best friends!
thank Adnan its diego your best friend and thanks.
LOVELY WORK, I THOUGHT IT REALLY MADE ME WANT TO BUY IT.WELL DONE!!!!!! 🙂
its expected 🙂
=:)
thanks I want to buy it to its great to tell the time.
i love that your work looks really neat and the headline stands out
Hi guys really good work everyone
It is super good that you used despite.
Thank’s Diren!
this piece of work is fabulous
I love your advert. It catches the reader’s eye .
I really like your advert it is amazing .
I really like the use of adjectives. Really good work!!!!!!!!
I really like it so much.ITS SO GOOD……
REALLY LIKE THE ADJECTIVES
ALSO NICE PERSWASIVE WORDS IN IT
i like that you used clear font, Zachary and harrry
This advert is really fantastic , because it is very persuasive and has great facts about the artefact.
I like that you have said,”People of the 18th centur would pay all there money for this clock.
This is my work !! Dear everybody, I really love the feedback, keep it coming. Also i would like to say a special thanks to my best friend harry who also did the work with me. 😉
You do got some amazing piece of sentences.
I like the way you have described the skeleton clock. I also like the way you have put the picture in the middle.
i like your adjectives
I like the way you have used your adjectives
We have spotted all the amazing stuff in are work. Hope other people spot them!
I also like your use of adjectives
Great work zac I love it.
Well done you was able to use really good conjunctions in your work.
I like how you and Harry worked and I bet you lots of time on it.
GOOD WORK !!!
I totally AGREE!
I like the way you use persuasive langue and we did the same thing. If I was going to buy it I would because I like the way use different langue . I think that you took time and effort to do the work. I think that your staff must be very happy with you .I hope you liked my reply.
Love your work Nancy. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK