The train the city and the ocean by Kemy. Look at how Kemy uses contrasting images.

So much depends
upon
rushing sparking speeding
trains
filled with busy
passengers
beside the car loaded
city
near the clear sparkling
ocean

Space!!

So much depends
upon
the glistening stars
leading
us through the
night
besides the white
moon

and this from Libby from Rotherfield. Look at her use of line breaks… I think William Carlos Williams would approve.

So much
So much depends
upon
a dull wooden
chair
carefully carved with a
knife
besides the table
set

An important part of our course is taking the time to read and comment upon others work. A big thank you to all of you who have done this. An example of useful feedback is:

Imdad Ahmed who comments on another pupils work: ” I like the way you used good adjectives”. See how Imdad is clear what he thinks is good about the work “adjectives”. Perhaps Imdad could identify adjectives he likes next time.

Finally, thank you for your comments on the poem itself. Look at this response by Xanthe….

I think it has slightly changed my understanding of poetry. I really liked how it made me think about small things that we don’t really think about their jobs. It’s made me think more about what very small things can do for us.

Again they explain their point in detail. I’d agree William Carlos Williams’ intention is to make us think about the small details.

Thank you ALL for your hard work so far. Keep it up and keep sharing and you might feature on next week’s review.