Dear all,
Thank you for sharing your thoughts, impressions, writing and art so far.
In week 3 we study “A Coast Scene with Fishermen Hauling a Boat Ashore (‘The Iveagh Sea-piece’) c.1803 Joseph Mallord William Turner.
We look forward to reading your responses below.
I really like this picture because the birds fight is very dramatic and I love drama it really caches your eyes .
Dramatic sums up the painting well.
I also don’t like it because the poor Heren is being killed for no resson but fun.
Fisherman pulling a boat like a grizzly bear.
Waves crashing like a thunder storm.
Sea as cold as an ice burg.
Sea howling like wolfs.
Air heavy like a wet towel.
The sea was an angry volcano.
Waves higher than clouds.
Thank you Josiah. You make us feel as if we were in the painting.
That is very dramatic just like the scene
Yes I agree
The boats crashed with thunder.
The air was heavy like a wet tow.
The sea splashed as a hungry dog.
The sea smashed and crashed everything.
The sky stormed.
The sky was not very nice.
I really like your structure Melissa. It gives a flow to your poem.
The sea is a galloping horse that feeds on humans.
It makes the sound of hail pounding on a hard metal ground at deep dark night.
Only a knight can win this fight against the sea light.
The Ocean will give you a fright!
Ships sink like two dead birds crashing into the night
Wow. What an opening line Freja. Your writing conveys the power of the sea.
crashing waves thunderous seas sailors wanting to flee. The sea as loud as zeus’s roar oh why! The sailors cry. Fish flipping waves flopping oh no they couldn’t sleep all night dreams felt like life and they fight for survival
Super simile linking the waves to Zeus’ roar.
it was stormy night and the sea was so angry it made the waves shout with rage and the
waves were pushing boats in to the shore.The sea was so noisy it scared lots of men
because they fort of a big fish like sharks.Chasing and snapping and terrifying then.
Another great opening. Thank you Harry.
It was a sooo stormy one night and the waves were moving like a kite
the waves were splashing not very nice
the air was smoke like fire and the light ning strike the waves were shouting at the mountins and the clouds were shouting stop stop stop and the thunder was clashing like 2 cars crashing!
I can visualise the waves moving like a kite. Thank you Freddie.
Air heavy like a wet towel
thrashing wet, thrashing water and the waves are higher than mountains
The sea was an angry volcano erupting
dark caves dark waves shout in with anger.
What a super opening line Hridhaan.
Crashing waves smashing seas is the sea is a hungry dog Giant and scary he rolls every day the air heavy like a wet towel water splashing out an elephant trunk the sea is an volcano erupting waves like a hail pounding on the ground wind so cold as ice sea howling like a wolf
Some memorable metaphors and similes here Jessie. Thank you.
The sea was a great roaring lion.
The fish were as slippery as a bar of soap.
The thunder was booming like a loud drum full.
The waves were cold and ice.
The sky was as dark as a cave.
The air was as heavy as a wet towel.
The thunder was an angry volcano.
The waves were higher than mountains.
I’m really enjoying your wonderful poetic responses to the painting. Thank you.
As the aggressive storm hit the boat, it split in half and the men frantically tried to fix the boat. On the shore, they pulled the boat with a rope strongly. The wind was powerful and furious blowing the boat away.
Before long , a horrible , scary storm came up and damaged everthing in it’s way . The depressed people aggresively tried to pull the sinking boats with all their strength and power . The fuming waves tried to crash the boats and the boats crashed everywhere visiously. Soon the storm and thunder went away slowly. It was dark and horendous this was the DEVILS HOUR !
With a flash of lightning the sky lit up above the cloud’s,the thunder struk hardly. Hardly enough to make the cloud’s disappear and out grew the dark and gloomy sky . It was already hard enough to see! The waves crashed past our boats while we where trieing to pull our boats back to shore. Some people fell in.Between the sea and the sky every think was dark and gloomy it was herendous this was the devles hour.
Thank you Lylah. You convey how dangerous fishing can be.
In a flash of lightning, the men were struggling to make the ship be on shore. No luck.
On the shore, the men were exhausted, they had pain in their hands because of the boat pulling.
After a short while, the waves were raging up and down .
It was extreme survival!
Suddenly, the men caught the fish on there horrendous mission.
The men were pulling furiously.
Super opening Malaika thrusting us straight into the action.
Whilst the crashing sea was furiously flowing all over the wet boats, the lightning was strugiling to control it self. Everywhere I looked, it was peril the men pulled the boat agressively but they just coudn’t get it back up to shore so they just gave up.
At that moment, even more disaster struck. The sea viciously blew a massive wave at all of the men, they couldn’t believe their eyes!
Great cliffhanger Emek.
Men were pushing aggressively as waves were crashing furiously. On shore some men were trying not to drown into the waves. The sky was dark and gloomy, it felt dull. All I could see was grey in the sky there was no blue or brightness.
Thank you Myana. Your short sentences works well in creating suspense.
I stood on the beach and the sky was getting darker and darker. The lightning
crashed and flashed in the moody sky.
I watched the fisherman haul the boat . The waves were going closer and closer and the angry sea was getting bigger and bigger .The boat was going to flip. All the fisherman were going to drown.
They were tired and sad and fish were destroyed. All was hard to go to water and the boat was too heavy. Then other fisherman helped to go to the water.
Thank you Istak. It’s interesting to provide an account in the first person.
The sky was gloomy and dark with lots of people pulling aggressively to get a boat to shore.
People looked like they were sweating but the big ocean waves still weren’t letting go, it looked so scary.
They constantly pulled but still no luck to find a way to shore. Everybody was terrified and didn’t know if they would be able to make it.
The men were struggling and kept on pulling furiously and tiredly. They looked like they were out of breath and I hoped hopefully they made it out alive.
Thank you Havin. You convey a sense of suspense with the structure of your writing.
On the shore, there was a basket full of eels and there was a blob fish on the sand.The sky was gloomy and the sea was destroying everything in sight. This was the Devil’s hour.
Great ending Sharon. I wonder if the devil could be the storm?
This picture is a little bit dramatic because like the clouds show grey like there will be a Thunderstorm which I’m guessing there is .and I really like the painting .
the vicous huters swooping
Fisherman across the shore
Wondering if they would fish no more
Waves are crashing from the bottom to the top
Their ship was a target because it was gonna drop
Thank you Hassan. It’s lovely to see you experimenting with a poetic response.
The muscular men crashed on a island. They started chopping until an accident happend and they started seeing a wave in the distance. In a blink of an eye there was flashing waves blowing the little life boats across the ilsland there was thunderstorms with flashing lights now it was a crumbled ilsland with an giganic ice statue he was disapointed he decided to leave and reach the water fall the men went on the boat and looked at the dark moon and he found a four leaf clover. One man got sea sick then they made there way to the water fall.
Thank you Victor. You have the basis for an adventure story here.
The tragic sea storm was getting angryir and the son was gone…for now constantly and constanly the waves were gettig bigger.As quick as the flash they saw a big boat so Three muscelar men were running to bring the boat to shore they shouted and abrupty GET OUT THE WAY! sudely a big whole was placed there was silence for a long time i thought i was dreaming bt no i wasnt i was day dreaming!.
Thank you for sharing Kavell.
Many waves were as dark as the sky and the fish were getting crashed by the wave.The fisher men quickly pulled the boats out of the water because the storm got worse and wors.In the blink of an eye,it started thundering like crazy,and the sand were like crumbled paper,and one fisher men said”somone is still sailling in the tragic ocean”people started swimming to the boat but suddenly the storm stoped it was like a amirical and the sun started to come up we were so happy and than we started sailing again and everyone said”YAAAAAAAY”
Thank you Chrystal. I like the contrast between what we see in the painting and your imagined future.
The tragic storm got worse and worse. There was uncontrollable waves. Every second got worse and everybody was hauling a very heavy boat. One of the fisherman tore a leg and arm muscle and everybody almost fell into the water. It was chaos. As soon as everybody thought the storm was over, the storm came again but it was even more deadly. Sadly somebody fell into the water, everybody tried saving him but it was to late he was gone. Everybody was terrified. Everybody was worried.
Thank you Demian. I like how you vary your sentence structure for effect.
Energetic waves crowding all over me whith my teamate we were struggling like never befor.I saw a missrable miniture fish lying on the sand.Anxiously,i tried to fix the boat those waves must og pulled the ancher.Finally we fixed it by constantly constantly pulling.Sudently the men who was relaxing he fell off the boat we tried to save him but the angry waves and storm transported us to an iland.In the distancei saw the boat “what are we going to do”i cried we tried calling help but no one heard us.Next morning,we relized that we slept on the dirty and yellow sand covering are face.
Ah very interesting to change the narrative perspective and write from the first person.
Many horrible waves were splashing everywere.Five scard men were stuck in the sea.Constantly,the sea waves were going crazy because there was a big storm.Some terifid men were scard of the storm.They needed some food but all of there food got soked.There was a man with a pipe and he was disturbed by the men on the boat.The man with the pipe had a masive boat so he saw some men on the shore and then saw the men in the horendos,stormy grey sea and disided to help the men in the sea.
Thank you Jodeyne. I like how you’ve used details from the painting in your writing.
those five fishermen are pulling in the boat to a crumpled beach one of them were bloing a trumpetnseem like the boat has crashed and the boat was all dented they tryed to fix it but t dint work they spraidpanted it grey but that did not cover up the dent’s they all said ”why is it not working?” they tryed again and again it still did not work
Thank you Sophie. I like the way you’re considering what might happen next.
Bright sun peeking
The strong storm was getting worse and worse. The ships anchored down. Then suddenly many strong violent waves hit the sandy shore. While a ship constantly tried to steer the ship to shore the waves pushed it away. Lightning then struck the ship in the sea and it sank. Afterwards a wave washed away the fish!
Everybody became very anxious. The waves became worse. They would have to abandon the ships and leave if they wanted to survive the man with the pipe retreated straight away but the others could not get on the boat to run away so they stood on each others shoulders but the last one could not get up they tried to help him but it was no use. He saw a cave and a ladder. “Go I know how to get out!” He said. He took the ladder and went in the cave. There was a hole leading where they left to he used the ladder to get up and escape the deadly waves.
Thank you Joseph. It seems you’ve created a mystery from the painting.
waves grey waves splashing dull waves crashing
Thank you Samara. This reminds me of haiku. It’s poetic.
Already,the thundering storm gets worse.whiles the enormous waves crumble over,black cloud consume the sky.thunder crashed and a lifeboat broke away into the west. captain said”don’t worry,we need to get fish before the coast rises…
Thank you Bille. I think your writing is the first to include dialogue. It’s interesting to think about the character of the different figures in the painting.
the beach is very gloomy and the man is stormy and strgging the waves very bubbly the man is a very scary the wether
Thank you for sharing your writing with us Bonnie.
As quick as a flash the thunder strike’d it was terrifying i wanted to.
The wave’s are extremely strong destroying all the boat’s picking them one by one the waves are beyond strong well at least i know these one’s are.The folk who pulled the boats are strong sky turned light it was soon morning the man that was smoking said oh it light and nothing happen and the men said yeah because we did something while you were smoking
Super start Sulayman. You gain our attention by thrusting us into the action.
There were some Fishermen that went fishing.Unexpectedly a powerfull storm appear.
It made the waves so powerful.They had to pull the ship to shore.
Thank you Diyako.
i think those shoose came from the bird
angry waves crashing
unstopble cloud thundering
hopeless fish flopping
this is peaceful but depressing at the same time
The fishermen tried to pull the boat to shore
i like it because this is what fishermen did everyday and the waves and wind are very dramatic
I love this painting beacuse it has a lot of drama
in the picture, it looks like a gloomy day.
I like the way that this painting looks really detailed and most of the part of this painting is full with waves.
It probably so many people to push the boat in the picture.
It probably took so many people to push the boat into the water
Wow! This painting is very dramatic and very eye-catching.I like this painting.
The fishemen was pushing the boat with the rods and hands And the man smoking the pipe Did’t do nothing he sat there letting everyone do the work And the Thrashing Waves destoryed there Deliteful Boats And the thundring Could Crushing the Sails to make them sink
Yes it is amusing how the man with the pipe is relaxing while there is so much action surrounding him.
I like how you did the waves they are really tall and fishes flapping
I like that there is a boat in the sea crashing into waves. Also, I love that there is so much detail.
That job must be very hard.
On the shore, there was a basket full of eels and there was a blob fish on the sand.The sky was dark and the sea was destroying everything it sees. This was the Devil’s hour.
Super opening Hafsa. I love this idea of a “devil’s hour”.
The fishermen had a very bad day. The wind and waves ruined their boats. They tried to pull their boats to the shore while the fish they captured fell off the boat.
It looks cool and scary because there are thunder and a mini sunami and people are pushing the boat to shoar and there is anman smoking a pipe
I quite like this picture but find it hard to believe that this was just a standard day. It is so full of struggle and drama .
Good point. Turner liked to turn the everyday into something dramatic.
I love this painting because this is atcually what Fishermen did every day and in the picture it looks like a gloomy day.
Yes Rayyan this would be an everyday job.
The deigns is amazing don’t you thing there is lots of dramatic things. Well done
very drmatic and and cool at the same time